You have an eloquent and friendly way of offering valuable criticism, and I appreciate your help. I had a feeling you would reply. Now, down to business. This poem came to my hand as if from some other source, or the corners of the archetypical part of my mind, and I wrote it verbatim, if you will. I’m not so sure I understand all the meanings to my own poem. If it seems esoteric I assure you it wasn‘t done intentionally, I don‘t feel I am that scholarly. It seems to me more of a battle within ones self in relationship to the outer world, and/or the spiritual primitive world. To tell you the truth it was all very eerie. You comments and suggestions seem so on point. You have made me aware of things I didn’t see. And I will take measures to implement the suggestions you offer. I do need some time to digest the comments you made, in order to work on improving this piece, to the best of my ability. I will change to the typical poetic format, as I was torn between this issue. I will try and make my language at bit clearer more understandable; however, I would like to be careful, not to take away from, what feels to me a more abstract expressionistic style. For instance, rather then a linear and literal perspective, pointing out of very concrete ideas and meanings; the piece seems to convey to me those things, feelings, thoughts, memories, and the like, that aren’t easily articulated. Or maybe I’m just reading to much into it, and overanalyzing it. At any rate I have some work to do, and even if it just proves to be an exercise in discipline, and a commitment to learning and improving, it has great value to me. I look forward in communicating with you more in the future. I also appreciate your kind words and encouragement.