Short story critique
Intrigued by short story contests, I began the long journey of composing such a beast. It took me several ideas, inspiration from the strangest places, an estimated half of a Bic click pen, and several pages of a now crumpled legal pad to finish the tale.
I'm looking for some people to read it for critique and possibly even errors (though I believe there are none). If you'd like to, visit the link below. If you could comment here or on the Wordpress, it would help me substantially, especially from fellow writers. My blog has a couple other things, but I've prepared this private post for all of you to enjoy and critique. I hope that it passes as a worthy piece of fiction, as it's my first official, thought-out short story.
Thank you for reading. Cheers! :)