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voiceart

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Imaginary Mermaids

voiceart Posted: Tue, Sep 6 2011 10:30 PM

Imaginary Mermaids

Pools of aqua

shimmering designs

imaginary mermaids

stroke the hands of time

fluid in motion

silent in their ways

journey through a dreamland

of God's eternal bay

drifting along

then spiraling deep

never revealing

the secrets they keep

miles of oceans

gulfs and lagoons

then surfacing briefly

beneath a full moon

ageless illusions

connected by water

imaginary mermaids

truly nature's daughters:

mother's happy child

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Re: Imaginary Mermaids

mother's happy child replied on Wed, Sep 7 2011 7:32 PM

Hi Voiceart,

I like this little Imaginary Mermaids. It's light and I can picture them spiraling deep - not worried about their own secrets, but bringing joy to those that watch.

Thanks,

Mother's Happy Child

Myra Ting

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Yankalilla, South Australia

Re: Imaginary Mermaids

Myra Ting replied on Fri, Oct 21 2011 7:55 PM

..........And if you watch ever so closely through the surf and the spray, they ride the white horses as they race from the day!

Thanks for the vision, voiceart

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thewordmaster

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Re: Imaginary Mermaids

thewordmaster replied on Fri, Oct 21 2011 9:39 PM

You do capture their beauty, of which i can see in my mind's eye.

from childhood's hour I have not been As others were - I have not seen

As others saw - i could not bring My passions from a common spring

(from Alone - Edgar Allan Poe)

Sister Anya

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Joined: 11-20-2011

Re: Imaginary Mermaids

Sister Anya replied on Sun, Nov 20 2011 9:21 AM

i think it's very beautiful, fluid in all ways except for the awkward "the" in the first stanza at the end. (maybe using a different tense would set the fluidity in motion earlier). I hope you don't mind the thought.

Thanks,

Anya

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