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lkg4wrd
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The Signature
lkg4wrd Posted: Sun, Jun 12 2011 8:09 PM Reply

This is a piece I wrote several years ago and it remains as vivid today as it did then.  I offer it for review with the goal of eventual publication.  Thank you in advance for your constructive comments.

 

The Signature

 

I gazed down at the hand holding the pen and it didn’t even feel like my own.  I looked around this meeting room made of glass with the expensive, dark mahogany furniture that the ridiculous fees we pay these people affords them. For the life of me, I never expected to be the person sitting in this chair, preparing to do this thing.  This is not my life.

The pen shook in my hand.  Spasmed so violently I almost dropped it on the shiny, glass-like mahogany table.  To steady myself, and the hand that couldn’t be mine, I took a deep breath and let it out very slowly. The assistant, noticing my distress, perhaps anticipating it, pushed the document closer.  I poised the pen on the solid line and began to sign my name; signing to acknowledge that it was done.  Over… Final…  The life we shared a bittersweet memory. I finished the signature, and took another deep breath then let it out. 19 years of marriage over with the signing of my name…just as it had begun.

I looked up at the man who I now call “my attorney”; eyes dry, face set, yet broken inside.

            I cleared my throat, “Is that all?”

            “Yes.  I’ll file it with the courts this afternoon.  The judge should sign and make it final in a couple of weeks at the most.”

He paused looking up at me. Although not what I’d call an attractive man, he had warm, kind eyes.

            “I know this wasn’t easy for you and I’m truly sorry you had to go through it.”

He paused again and continued to hold my gaze with his,

            “I have to say, after dealing with your husband over these several months, I honestly don’t know how you put up with him as long as you did.  I’ve encountered many difficult personalities in the years I have done this job, but he ranks the top 3 for me. You are a very strong woman.” He smiled.

            I smiled weakly at his compliment, though I felt anything but strong at this moment.

 “Thank you.”

Little did he know that I would have “put up” with it forever…that’s how deeply I loved him. 

So, pushing the chair away from the large table, I grabbed my purse and stood up. I lightly shook his outstretched hand and turned to leave, hoping never to have to return.

As I made it to the end of the hallway, I heard his raised voice trailing behind me,

            “Oh, we will mail you a copy of the final decree once it is signed. “

I called out another “thank you” as I rounded the corner to the elevators. The secretary smiled at me as I walked passed with gentle understanding mirrored in her face. How many poor souls does she smile that same smile at in a given week? Sadly, I really don’t want to know.

 I pushed the elevator button, my hand beginning to shake again, very slightly.  Inside the elevator I felt the wetness of the first tear sliding down my cheek.  I wiped it away as the elevator door closed and forced myself to breath.  Exiting the elevator, I felt the tremors starting in my stomach and my shoulders were beginning to slump against the weight of the grief held captive inside me.  Dear Lord do not let me lose it here, I pleaded.

With 3 blocks to go to get to the parking garage, I quickened my pace. I barely noticed the people or events going on around me.  I don’t recall noticing crosswalk signs, just numbly followed the crowd. Praying, begging with each step not to crumble into a jelly-like mass on the concrete.  I recall rounding the corner and stepping into the parking garage.  Taking the stairs 2 at a time, the tears finally spilled over as I reached the 3rd floor.  The sob, long suppressed, escaped my lips and I realized this time I was going to be quite powerless to stop the tide of emotions and tears that were crashing through the weakly constructed armour around my heart.  I sprinted down the aisle to my van, opened the door with a noticeable struggle, and threw myself into the front seat.

Once inside, the trembling, the sobs and the tears successfully broke free of the tight hold I’d maintained for almost a year. The grief, so much an arms-length companion, finally had its way.  Consuming me; rendering me helpless to control the direction or the course.  With heart wrenching sobs and cries of anger and disbelief, of sorrow and feelings of failure and loss like I hadn’t felt since my 6 year old brother died, I gave in.  I gave in to the grief.  I gave in to the sorrow.  I gave in so I could go on. So I could learn to accept and to find a way to live without the man, the family and the dreams I’d based my entire life on.

 I gave in so, eventually, I could live…again

 
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mother's happy child
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Re: The Signature
mother's happy child replied on Mon, Jun 20 2011 9:29 AM Reply

Hi lkg4wrd,

I like your story "The Signature" because it has some strong feelings of what you went through and I can appreciate that.  However - I don't mean to be critical but - I don't think it's too exciting for the general public.  I have written many a piece to get it out of my head and down on paper thinking it would help me get through the crisis.  And that's exactly what it did.  After putting it out there for others to read, I realized It was for me more than for anyone else.  It was too common for the general public - it received little or no attention.  It was my therapy to write it and read it. Maybe if I (we, you and I) put some "kick" into it - we might have something.

I wish you well and whatever you do - don't stop writing,

Mother's Happy Child

 
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Re: The Signature
lkg4wrd replied on Wed, Jun 22 2011 12:06 AM Reply

Hi Mother's Happy Child:

Thank you for your honesty.  It just shows how very different the opinions can be when we ask for feedback. I don't disagree that writing pieces like this are therapeutic. I do disagree on the "not too exciting for the general public". Many people have told me they appreciate the raw, real emotion that comes through in the piece and that it helps knowing that someone else understands the depth of despair going through this brings.

Like I said, there will always be great differences of opinion and I appreciate your comments.

Lynnell

 
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book hugger
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RE:The Signature
book hugger replied on Wed, Jun 22 2011 7:09 PM Reply

Excellent, well written and believable. This certainly would appeal to the general public, for although the circumstances might be different, most , if not all,  have at one time in their lives  experienced a sadness, a loss .Grief is universal and that is why it would appeal to everyone. Good luck with your writing.

 
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