Yikes. Caught this run-on
sentence in a morning sports column about an NBA playoff game; felt compelled
to read it aloud to my wife over breakfast to help ease her into the day (see
wasn't the issue Tuesday night. The Bucks hung with the Hawks about as long as
humanly possible without the kind of center that might have put a
cease-and-desist order on some of the mismatches that continued to occur with
regularity on a floor where the home team almost never loses.
This is called trying too
hard, and this sportswriter, unfortunately, makes a habit of it. The sentence
does make some sense, but only with too much head-scratching on the reader’s
part. Had the writer, and copy editor, read this aloud before turning it in, I
highly doubt it would have passed muster.
In most nonfiction
writing, if you’re doing acrobatics trying to make a sentence work or to be
clever, or making a single sentence do too much heavy lifting, it’s a good sign
you’re about to torture the reader. Put the poor thing out of its misery and
-- Ron Kovach, senior editor, The Writer
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